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"This is an interesting script with some real moments of tension. The log line and title grabbed my attention right away and made me want to learn more. It's a textbook thriller, full of twists and turns and a hero we want to root for against ever increasing odds.
The idea of a Black man getting targeted by casino security after he films a racist rant is interesting and compelling. The twist towards the end puts an interesting spin on the original idea -- classic thriller.
The plot is intricate and well-paced. There wasn't a moment reading the script where I felt bored or confused. Page 32, in particular, the scene in the bathroom, was when I first felt the tension ratchet up. Glenn's battery going down to one bar, coupled with the encroaching security guard, and then the planting of evidence, had me on the edge of my seat.
The characters are interesting. Derek and Wayne's relationship was probably the most developed. Lucy was likable and I wanted to see her succeed... Derek overall was a very well-developed villain. Victor was also an interesting character... His storyline held an unexpected twist that I like a lot, especially as we got to see Derek's desperation increase...
The dialogue was generally well written. It was never on the nose or stilted. I like how Derek's "inspirational" speeches related to the action that was intercut with them, providing fun moments of dramatic irony.
There are several themes explored in this story. The most obvious one is "cancel culture" or "wokeness". Themes of greed, addiction, and vengeance are also present in an interesting way.
In general, this is a good script. It's pretty polished....
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"The screenplay 'CANCELLED' offers a compelling narrative with strong themes of racism, redemption, and justice. It features well-developed characters and a gripping plot that keeps the audience engaged.... Overall, it has the potential to be a powerful film...
This script offers a unique blend of high-stakes casino drama, gritty realism, and compelling character arcs, setting it apart from typical casino thrillers. The story dives deep into the dark underbelly of the casino world, exposing corruption, manipulation, and moral ambiguity in a way that keeps audiences on the edge of their seats. By weaving together the journeys of a grieving man seeking redemption, a charismatic motivational speaker hiding dark secrets, and a compassionate waitress caught in the crossfire, the script delivers a powerful and engaging narrative that explores themes of justice, betrayal, and the human cost of ambition. With its authentic dialogue, morally gray characters, and unpredictable twists, this script promises a thrilling and thought-provoking experience for audiences who crave a fresh take on the casino thriller genre....
Standout Features:
--Unique Hook: The screenplay's setting in a casino provides a unique and intriguing environment for the story, adding elements of suspense and tension.
--Plot Twist: The reveal creates a shocking and unexpected twist that adds another layer of complexity to the story.
--Unique Character: The character of Lucy, a compassionate cocktail waitress, adds a layer of humanity and vulnerability to the story, contrasting with the ruthlessness of the main antagonist and the corruption of the casino environment.
--Genre Blend: The screenplay blends elements of crime thriller, social commentary, and drama, creating a compelling and engaging story.
--Distinctive Setting: The casino setting provides a unique backdrop for the story, offering a visually striking and dynamic environment that reinforces the themes of greed, corruption, and power.
--Innovative Idea: The use of video footage and technology as a tool for exposing corruption and fighting injustice adds a contemporary and relevant aspect to the story.
Target Audience Demographics: Adults aged 25-54, fans of crime thrillers, dramas, and movies with strong social commentary. This movie could also appeal to fans of casino-themed movies and thrillers.
Marketability: The screenplay boasts a compelling plot with high stakes, complex characters, and a unique setting. The social commentary on corruption, power dynamics, and racism adds another layer of depth and relevance. It has the potential to attract a wide audience and generate buzz.
The screenplay features a unique blend of genres, including crime thriller, drama, and social commentary, which could appeal to a diverse audience. It explores compelling themes, particularly the impact of power and corruption on individuals and society, which are always relevant. It also has the potential to spark debate and discussion.
The screenplay has compelling characters with complex motivations and a gripping storyline. It deals with relevant social themes, such as racism, corruption, and the abuse of power, making it potentially appealing to a contemporary audience. However, the dark and violent nature of the story could limit its appeal to some viewers.
Profit Potential: High, due to its strong appeal to a wide adult audience, its potential for award nominations, and its marketability to both domestic and international markets."
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BREFNI O'ROURKE is a New York based screenwriter and novelist. A former stand-up comedian, he is the author of more than 50 original feature-length spec screenplays, primarily within the action, suspense-thriller, and horror genres. The "cinematic Brefniverse" includes:
"The Awning", a supernatural thriller, has been named a quarterfinalist in the 2023 WeScreenplay Feature contests. It was named a finalist in the 2022 Story Pros International Screenplay Contest and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 6% of discoverable projects. In March of 2023 it made the Red List as the # 8 ranked thriller screenplay. (The novel is now available on Amazon https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CD4ZKQDZ )
"Wake", a psychological thriller, was recognized as a semifinalist in the 2022 Creative World Awards. It was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the Final Draft/Big Break Contest (top 10% of entries) and the American Zoetrope contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 23% of discoverable projects.
"Descendancy" was recognized as a Quarterfinalist in The Script Lab - Free Screenplay Contest 2022 and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 20% of discoverable projects.
"Moving Day", a supernatural thriller, was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the 2015 Final Draft/Big Break Contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 34% of discoverable projects.
"Panopticon", an action-thriller, was selected as a "Notable Project" by Amazon Studios (one of only 50 projects recognized as such).
"God's Work", a supernatural action thriller was optioned by The Ferla Consulting Group.
"Threshold", a horror-thriller (Cowritten with Elizabeth Rowin and Greg DeRochie) was optioned by Contribution Films. (http://www.contributionfilms.com/threshold.html).
Read his novels on Amazon Kindle! https://www.amazon.com/author/brefniorourke
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