**********The REVIEWS are in on UNDER MY SKIN**********
"...very solid writing."
(-Lionsgate development executive)
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"Cinematic Quality: very good. Plot: very good. Really good story. Several clever twists and turns that will keep the audience wanting more."
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"Great characterizations, great sense of atmosphere. I could "see" this one as I was reading it, and that, to me anyway, is always a good sign... the story moved along nicely... I love your writing style, and the premise is rock solid."
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"I appreciate your choice of subject and the possibilities it offers for an interesting cinematic treatment. Right off the bat your screenplay plunges us into the world of tattooing and to the visual qualities that seem a natural fit for an intriguing film. THE PLOT: Your plot proceeds, as a movie should, like a shot off a shovel. And yet you pace the whole thing admirably, holding cards with important information close to your chest. You know how to hold fire, and then how to blast away. In addition, the surprises in the plot surprise, while at the same time remaining largely believable, a tough trick to pull off. CHARACTERIZATION: There are many people in your screenplay, yet effective characterization makes each an individual, displaying weaknesses as well as strengths. The way people talk, the way they interact with each other, moment to moment, all this works quite well... A considerable achievement on your part."
(-Zoetrope Virtual Studio)
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"A framed ex-con gets caught up in the middle of drug investigation. the idea of undercover cops has been done many times but your Weyland/Burton twist was done well...
There are several side stories that make for interesting layers to this story. Sonny/Deano, Deano / Moylen, Deano /Luis are all good recurring stories. The relationships are good and the characters are consistently interesting. The Deano/Jenna dynamic I particularly liked.
I liked that the author introduces Deano as a tattoo artist in prison. The twist with him actually tattooing the prison guard adds a little humor to the scene...
The dialogue is concise without a lot of needless exposition... You give each character their own voice. A difficult task with so many characters.
Your character intros are generally quite good... Deano is introduced as good at what he does and he knows it. He has an understandable chip on his shoulder and you do a very good job with him. Mike is an equally strong character as is Jenna. You do well, generally, to describe your characters with more than just what they look like.
Your scene descriptions were, in the most part, easy to follow and well written.
Themes of good vs evil is played out well...
(Coverfly X)
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BREFNI O'ROURKE is a New York based screenwriter actively marketing all of his materials for possible sale or option. He is the author of more than 50 original feature-length spec screenplays, primarily within the action, suspense-thriller, and horror genres. The "cinematic Brefniverse" includes:
"The Awning", a supernatural thriller, was a quarterfinalist in the 2023 WeScreenplay Feature contests. It was named a finalist in the 2022 Story Pros International Screenplay Contest and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 6% of discoverable projects. In March of 2023 it made the Red List as the # 8 ranked thriller screenplay.
"Wake", a psychological thriller, was recognized as a semifinalist in the 2022 Creative World Awards. It was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the Final Draft/Big Break Contest (top 10% of entries) and the American Zoetrope contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 22% of discoverable projects.
"Descendancy", an action-thriller, was recognized as a Quarterfinalist in the Script Lab - TSL Free Screenplay Contest 2022 and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 18% of discoverable projects.
"Moving Day", a supernatural thriller, was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the 2015 Final Draft/Big Break Contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 34% of discoverable projects.
"Panopticon", an action-thriller, was selected as a "Notable Project" by Amazon Studios (one of only 50 projects recognized as such).
"God's Work", a supernatural action thriller was optioned by The Ferla Consulting Group.
"Threshold", a horror-thriller (cowritten with Elizabeth Rowin and Greg DeRochie) was optioned by Contribution Films. (http://www.contributionfilms.com/threshold.html).
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