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“Placing it in the context of a pandemic is a good idea, which leaves room for a fresh approach to a genre that seems to be popular these days.
The opening pages of the script are well-written. Very sparse scene description and action go a long way and you certainly have a knack for writing very few details into an involving thriller. At first, when I was reading it through, I felt that opening the script with Sean Paxton, hiding out in the woods was terrific and then, we find out more details along the way, (the shooting in Brockton, Sherriff Reardon searching for Paxton, a mysterious dark figure listening to the latest news report of the shooting)
Kate Baxter is a good character and one that is suitable for a thriller like this one. She's tough and vulnerable, and yet, she cares. Her father is lying in a hospital bed while the manhunt is still ongoing. I like the exchange with her father... It fills us in on what is happening between what we know and what we are going to know later on. We also get an insight into how her presence is crucial to the webinar meeting... We also learn how much she is willing to back herself up, especially when the CDC director is killed.
Another thing that I thought was clever in your script is the theme of whether the Plague Doctors were or were not anti-vaxxers. This is an interesting way of ratcheting up the suspense and making room for injecting some serious input into this script. I thought that this was handled very well within the story... it worked so well and it kept me invested throughout the entire story.
I enjoyed reading your script and I like the fresh approach of taking a familiar story and injecting some serious subject matter within the backdrop of the pandemic... You did a good job, of keeping the suspense level high and keeping me guessing throughout the script... this script does stand out... “
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"Overall, the screenplay is well-written and engaging, with a strong narrative and well-developed characters. The strengths of the screenplay lie in its ability to create a suspenseful and immersive atmosphere, effectively introduce conflicts and character motivations, and provide satisfying resolutions... this screenplay has the potential to be a compelling and successful feature film...
The combination of medical thriller, conspiracy, and survival elements creates a unique and engaging story that can appeal to a wide audience.
The film features strong female and male leads, which can attract a diverse audience and generate interest in the characters' journeys.
The story's exploration of current issues, such as vaccine development and conspiracy theories, can resonate with audiences and generate buzz.
This screenplay exhibits a compelling and tense atmosphere throughout, with engaging dialogue and character interactions. The use of unique and innovative elements, such as drones and the Plague Doctor, adds depth and intrigue to the story... Overall, the screenplay maintains a high level of quality and engagement, making it a captivating and thrilling experience for the audience.
The screenplay's concept of a deadly plague and its impact on society is consistently present and well-executed, with unique and innovative elements, such as drones and the Plague Doctor figure. The screenplay explores relevant and timely themes, such as the importance of vaccination, the spread of misinformation, and the burden of the pandemic... Overall, the screenplay's concept is a strong foundation for a compelling and thrilling story.
The plot of this screenplay is a well-developed and engaging narrative that keeps the audience on the edge of their seats. The characters and relationships are well-developed, and the story is filled with tension and conflict that move the story forward... The key strengths of the plot include its engaging and suspenseful nature, well-developed characters and relationships, and multiple plot twists and turns...
The screenplay demonstrates a strong ability to maintain high conflict levels, with well-developed internal and external conflicts, multi-layered tension, and effective use of antagonists and obstacles."
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BREFNI O'ROURKE is a New York based screenwriter and novelist. A former stand-up comedian, he is the author of more than 50 original feature-length spec screenplays, primarily within the action, suspense-thriller, and horror genres. The "cinematic Brefniverse" includes:
"The Awning", a supernatural thriller, has been named a quarterfinalist in the 2023 WeScreenplay Feature contests. It was named a finalist in the 2022 Story Pros International Screenplay Contest and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 6% of discoverable projects. In March of 2023 it made the Red List as the # 8 ranked thriller screenplay. (The novel is now available on Amazon https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CD4ZKQDZ )
"Wake", a psychological thriller, was recognized as a semifinalist in the 2022 Creative World Awards. It was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the Final Draft/Big Break Contest (top 10% of entries) and the American Zoetrope contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 23% of discoverable projects.
"Descendancy" was recognized as a Quarterfinalist in The Script Lab - Free Screenplay Contest 2022 and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 20% of discoverable projects.
"Moving Day", a supernatural thriller, was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the 2015 Final Draft/Big Break Contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 34% of discoverable projects.
"Panopticon", an action-thriller, was selected as a "Notable Project" by Amazon Studios (one of only 50 projects recognized as such).
"God's Work", a supernatural action thriller was optioned by The Ferla Consulting Group.
"Threshold", a horror-thriller (Cowritten with Elizabeth Rowin and Greg DeRochie) was optioned by Contribution Films. (http://www.contributionfilms.com/threshold.html).
Read his novels on Amazon Kindle! https://www.amazon.com/author/brefniorourke
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